still going strong

[truepenny]

"The Ghoul Hunters" now has:
(a.) a finished draft: 5,500 words
(b.) a new title: "Blue Lace Agate"
(c.) and a tweaked opening line that's got better kick:*

They hadn't caught the shoggoth larva smugglers yet, but Jesperson had other things on his mind: "And, ah, how are you and Sharpton doing, Keller?"

It needs:
(a.) 500 fewer words, for preference
(b.) a consistent voice
(c.) a sequel

The sequel already has
(a.) a title:"A Night in Electric Squidland"
(b.) an opening line:

Some days Mick Sharpton was almost normal.

Yes, I'm having a good day. Let's all revel in it while it lasts.

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*I think the idea of shoggoth larvae came from slithytove and his sourdough starter. slithytove, if you object to my use of your larvae ... oh god that came out SO WRONG ... *ahem* slithytove, if you would prefer me not to borrow the concept of shoggoth larvae from you, please just say so. I can make 'em oviparous or something.

Comments

[libskrat]

I thought shoggoths reproduced by budding. Shows what I know.

[truepenny.livejournal.com]

I don't actually remember what--if anything--HPL says on the subject.

[libskrat]

Nothing, as far as I know. I just look at my plush shoggoth and see something that just ought to reproduce by budding.

[truepenny.livejournal.com]

I look at my plush shoggoth and see something that oughtn't to reproduce AT ALL.

[libskrat]

Awww. Doesn't everybody need a gray plush thingumbobber with hot-pink veins and lots of lime-green eyes?

[handworn.livejournal.com]

Oh, oviparous!